Application Do's and Don'ts

What to do and not to do when writing titles, abstracts, and student role.

Project title

Project titles must be no longer than 85 characters (not including spaces). Capitalize only the first word of the title plus words that are always capitalized (names of people, countries, etc). If your title has two parts separated by a colon, then also capitalize the first word after the colon (e.g. Dartmouth around the globe: Impact of off-campus programs)

NO:
Senior Honors Thesis--Music and Memory

  • "Senior honors thesis" should not be included in the title
  • Doesn't adhere to the capitalization guidelines
  • Uses a prohibited character (dashes)
  • Not descriptive

YES:
The impact of musical training on memory

NO:
Investigating the Efficacy of High Frequency Deep Brain Stimulation in a Rat Model of Binge Drinking: Towards a Neuromodulation Intervention for Binge Drinking

  • Too long
  • Doesn't adhere to the capitalization guidelines

YES:
The efficacy of high frequency deep brain stimulation in a rat model of binge drinking

Abstract: general guidelines

The purpose of an abstract is convey the essential aspects of your project. The abstract should be a single paragraph of 150-250 words, written in your own words (NOT cut and pasted from your advisor's research abstract), and worded in such a way that it is comprehensible to a general audience.

What to include in your abstract:

  • Research topic:  begin with a clear statement of the topic and concise description of your project. Are you experimenting with color in watercolor paintings? Are you trying to identify the neural correlates of a cognitive process? Are you analyzing how the media influences political processes?
  • Background:  this will vary according to the type of project but should be very brief -- just enough to put the project into context.  It may include such things as previous findings in the field, your own academic work on the topic, consideration of the wider context of the issue, the importance of the topic, etc.
  • Methods:  briefly summarize how you intend to approach the project. Are you going to be doing surveys? Archival research? Lab experiments? Do NOT include details such as number of subjects, statistical approaches, etc.
  • Conclusion:  comment on your anticipated outcome and/or how the findings from your project might contribute to the academic field

What NOT to include your abstract:

  • Your project title
  • Subheadings
  • Bullet points and lists
  • References and citations
  • Tabs and paragraph returns
  • Special characters (e.g. dashes, quotation marks, tildes, umlauts, quotation marks)
  • Phrases like "senior thesis" or "leave term"
  • Name of your faculty mentor, the lab or other people you have been or will be working with (that can be included in the "student role" section)
  • Year and term of your project (especially words like "winterim")
  • The name of any UGAR program (e.g. Presidential Scholars, URAD, etc.) or references to specific classes or honors theses, etc.
  • Any reference to outcomes like a potential book, academic paper, symposium, or whatever, whether authored by just your faculty mentor or by both of you. Focus on the research, the anticipated findings, and the implications of the research (not on the final format).

Abstract: focus on the research

State the purpose of the research itself, not your own plans or your experience with the research or the specific UGAR program. You should also focus on the research you will be doing and your role in the project, not on your faculty research mentor. For example, your faculty mentor may be planning to write a book or article or hold a symposium, but that is not what you are doing. You are doing research on a particular topic, and your abstract should focus on what the research is about and what you will be doing on the project.

NO:

  • I am applying for a Presidential Scholarship project to work with Professor…
  • My Presidential Scholar research will focus on…
  • My research with Professor Smith looks to analyze how trade and technological changes influence governmental responses...
  • This project will be a continuation of research that I first began in my freshman summer and have continued throughout my sophomore year…
  • I will be assisting my faculty mentor on his/her book/conference...

YES:

  • The goal of the project is to investigate how entrepreneurs learn from observing the success or failures of other entrepreneurial ventures.
  • Iron is one of the nutrients essential to life, and humans around the world obtain most of their dietary iron from plants. For this reason, much research is going into understanding how plants take up and use iron under a variety of conditions, and how these responses can be improved upon.

Abstract: point of view

This must be written in your own words. Do not write the description from your research mentor's point of view and do not cut and paste a description written by your faculty mentor or others in the research group. Abstracts should be written in the third person, avoid the use of "I" and "me."

NO:
This research enlists the assistance of a philosophically-minded student to find and analyze textual resources relevant to...

YES:
The research will involve identifying and analyzing textual resources relevant to...

Abstract: references

Do not include references or citations in the abstract.

NO:
There is a significant income-achievement gap such that individuals of low-socioeconomic status (SES) do not perform as well as children of high-SES in almost every academic domain measured (e.g., Bradley & Corwyn, 2002; McLoyd, 1998; Reardon, 2011).

YES:
Previous research has demonstrated that there is a significant income-achievement gap such that individuals of low-socioeconomic status (SES) do not perform as well as children of high-SES in almost every academic domain measured.

Abstract: example #1

NO:
I will be continuing the work that I have been doing for the past year on the project entitled "Using neuroscience to categorize music." The project investigates real, objective measures that can be used to accurately predict human neurological responses to musical patterns. This would apply to a diverse amount of stimuli - as found in recordings from all types of music and as perceived by human listeners, from what a chef hears while preparing a meal from clinking of silverware and china to what a conductor hears while conducting an orchestral score from memory. 

The goal of the project is to engineer a search engine for music based on real, perceptually salient, and quantitative aspects of music audio signals. The project combines research in audio and acoustic engineering, perception and cognition, computer science, and music. In simpler terms, it is taking a new way of analyzing musical rhythm patterns by separate segments of audio into independent components and organizing them into latent timbre channels. 

The first step is encoding streams of feature data in these channels, thus encoding separate information about each aspect of the musical mixture.  I will assist in the design, running, and analysis of behavioral studies in human rhythm perception - specifically the stimulus preparation, collecting and analyzing fMRI data, processing similarity matrices for computational analysis, and helping to design both computational algorithms that predict the behavioral responses to rhythmic aspects of music audio and also an interface for searching / browsing music by rhythmic content. 

  • Too long
  • Multiple paragraphs instead of just one
  • Includes the project title (don't do this!)
  • Extraneous information (e.g. the chef/silverware and orchestra conductor sentence)
  • Information that should be in other sections of the application
    • the first sentence should be in "related experience"
    • the last paragraph should be in "student role"

YES:
The goal of the project is to engineer a search engine for music based on real, perceptually salient, and quantitative components of music audio signals. To determine what components are salient to listeners, neurological responses to specific auditory signals will be measured by presenting auditory stimuli to research participants while they undergo functional magnetic resonance imaging (fMRI).  The auditory stimuli will be created with known, categories, and organized rhythmic patterns and will be presented in different channels.  Therefore, information about each aspect of the musical mixture can be encoded separately and the participants' responses to specific stimuli can be analyzed and compared.  Based on these computational analyses, algorithms will be developed that can predict behavioral responses to rhythmic aspects of music.  The algorithms will then enable searching and browsing of music by rhythmic content.

Abstract: Example #2

NO:

I will be researching topics in poetic craft for a series of seminars (and essays based on those seminars), with the personal goal of furthering my experience as not just a writer, but a scholar of poetry as well. This will involve scanning a wide array of the zeitgeist, especially looking at podcasts, magazines, and archival databases. One topic that I expect to work on is an investigation of titles in poetry: categorizing different styles of titling (simple, suggestive, intriguing/hooking, etc.), looking at historical changes in how titles are experimented with, and more. In general, the goal of this project is to produce three to five researched seminars or essays on specific aspects of poetic craft. 

  • Includes reference to a series of seminars and essays (focus should be on the research the student will be doing, not on the long-term outcome for the faculty mentor)
  • Focuses on personal goals as a writer/scholar (that should be in the section on relationship of the research to the student's academic goals)
  • Describes details about one component of the methods rather than on the overall methodology
  • Conclusion is about the number of essays rather than the scholarly goal of the project

YES:

The goal of this project is to study contemporary poetry for trends and changes. The field of contemporary poetry is rapidly changing, and categorizing and analyzing these changes will ensure that a writer can synthesize their own goals as a poet and reader with the cutting edge of modern poetry. The research will focus on producing essay-form documentation of these developments and changes, for use by both writers and scholars. Topics to be covered include looking at poetic structure, the order in which information is released to the reader, how expectations are created and broken, how poems begin, and how context can be delivered efficiently. These areas will be approached through a scanning of the zeitgeist, namely in podcasts, magazines, articles, archival databases, books, and author interviews. The outcome of the project will be a series of researched seminars or essays on specific aspects of poetic craft. 

Student role

This is applicable only if the application form includes a specific question about student role. 

This must be one paragraph (125-250 words) written from the first person perspective (using words like I, me, my). It should describe what you will specifically be doing (e.g. interviewing subjects, making annotated bibliographies, synthesizing chemical compounds, etc.). It is not sufficient to simply say that you will be working on the research.

NO:
I will design and test substrate boards.

  • Not enough detail for the reader to understand what you will actually be doing

YES:
I will work with my faculty mentor and the other lab personnel in designing the substrate boards to hold the array of miniature dielectric probes. This will involve work in SolidWorks and other electronics design software.  I will be testing the sensor arrays and then helping to compile, analyze, and present the data taken during tests. In addition, I may help prepare reports and any other necessary literature, as well as researching microwave radiation and its application to dielectric probes. As a member of the lab, I will sit in on group meetings and help the lab in whatever other projects may be necessary.

Abstract vs. student role: Guidelines

If there are separate sections in the application form for abstract and student role, keep in mind that these two sections have different purposes and should include different types of information. Be sure to differentiate between the goals and general methodology of the research and your specific role in the research.

Abstract/project description: focus on the overall goals and general methods

  • The goal is to test the hypothesis that HCN channels cause sodium current through sodium-potassium ATPases (sodium pumps) in dendrites to be consistent, independent of cell activity. If this hypothesis is correct, the sodium concentration in dendrites will stay constant regardless of when action potentials have occurred.
  • We will use a combination of experimental and modeling approaches to reveal the neural substrates of such cognitive biases. We will see whether subjects are able to closely estimate the evidence provided by individual cues or their combinations, and see if they exhibit contradictory biases in their estimates of reward and the choices they make when alternative choices are not equally rewarding.

Student Role: explain what you will actually be doing

  • I will run participants through the study protocol. This involves preparing the electrode cap on the participant's head and reducing noise and unwanted muscle activity artifacts in the brain waves.
  • My role will be to manufacture and characterize the freeze-cast carbon-based scaffolds to determine structure-property-processing correlations with which future scaffolds can be custom-designed and optimized for applications such as water filtration and deionization.
  • My role in the project will include running participants in experiments, coding and analyzing data, and creating stimuli for future experiments.
  • I'll be using B-roll footage of daily life taken by local media across the country over the years, and connect it with the many scattered data-rich sources that exist. Further, I'll be working on solutions for connections between Scalar and MediaThread (media sorting software platforms), then connecting that platform with the source data from a variety of institutions as large as the Library of Congress and as small as Domitor, a group of academics working on the nebulous pre-film movie era.

Abstract and student role: Example #1

Abstract/project description:

This project is focused on the arsenic concentration in groundwater in New Hampshire and its implication for children's health. Arsenic is not only a carcinogen shown to cause skin, lung, and bladder cancer, but also may cause non-carcinogenic problems in children, such as low birth weight and low growth rate. New Hampshire does not require testing of private wells for contamination; therefore, many residents (1 in 5 wells in NH) use water with concentrations of arsenic that exceed the EPA's "safe" level of 10 parts per billion. The goal of the project is to evaluate webGIS as a means to disseminate information about groundwater arsenic concentration to people beyond academia. A webGIS site is a website that possesses the functionality of geographic information systems (GIS), with which the user can view information presented as maps and perform inquiries using spatial analytical tools. This approach has potential implications for human health by making data on arsenic levels available to the general public.

Student role:

This study will adopt a qualitative approach. I will design a survey, identify interviewees, conduct interviews, analyze the collected data, and prepare a report about the findings. Specifically, I will evaluate the two webGIS sites aforementioned through comparing different functions provided and different designs about information presentation, map visualization, and website operation. It is expected that based on this study problems of these websites can be identified and optimal designs can be recommended.

Abstract and student role: Example #2

Abstract

The goal of this project is to study contemporary poetry for trends and changes. The field of contemporary poetry is rapidly changing, and categorizing and analyzing these changes will ensure that a writer can synthesize their own goals as a poet and reader with the cutting edge of modern poetry. The research will focus on producing essay-form documentation of these developments and changes, for use by both writers and scholars. Topics to be covered include looking at poetic structure, the order in which information is released to the reader, how expectations are created and broken, how poems begin, and how context can be delivered efficiently. These areas will be approached through a scanning of the zeitgeist, namely in podcasts, magazines, articles, archival databases, books, and author interviews. The outcome of the project will be a series of researched seminars or essays on specific aspects of poetic craft. 

Student role

I will review a wide range of modern as well as historical sources, including podcasts, magazines, and archival databases, to identify and categorize changes in poetry over time. One area of exploration will be the titles of poems.  I will start by categorizing different styles of titling (simple, suggestive, intriguing/hooking, etc.) and then looking at historical changes in titles.  My goal is to identify trends in the way that poets experiment with different types of titles over time and try to determine whether there are underlying patterns or principles to this progression of titling.

Relationship of the project to your goals

This section is only relevant if the application form has questions asking about the relationship of the project to your academic and career goals.

Guidelines:

  • Relationship of the project to your academic goals: You do not need to refer to specific classes (although you can if it is relevant) but you should provide a thoughtful explanation of how this experience will contribute to your academics (e.g. provide "real world" context for courses you have taken, help you figure out your academic path, allow you to explore something outside of your major/minor).
  • Relationship of the project to your career goals: This can be very specific if you already have career plans, but it could also be more general (e.g. you are hoping to figure out whether to go to medical school to be a clinician or graduate school to be a researcher)